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英検二級 ライティング添削をお願いします！！
詳しく教えていただけると助かります！

【問題】Today in Japan, many buildings and public areas have a lot of lights for decoration, such as the lights used during Christmas. Do you think this is a good idea?

POINTS
Safety
The environment
Tourism

I agree to go to important historical sites in order to understand history better.
I have two reasons.
First, we can get a many experience.
we can know about historical sites in internet. But, it is important to go our foot.
In particular, children should go there, because they learn variety history at school.
Second, it is easy to go there.
Maybe, it costs a lot.
But, we can go earlier than long time ago.
because, a lot of vehicle depelop.
For example, cars. ships, and so on.
Therefore, I think that this is a good idea.

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