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Question

添削お願いします。英検準2級の長文です。

質問
Do you think it is a good idea for people to have a car?

回答
I think it is a good idea for people to have a car．I have two reasons. First People can go to many places. for example They can go to beautiful scenerys.
Second, I can going to picnic with my family and my friends. From these my thought it is a good idea for people to have a car．

Answer 1

質問
Do you think it is a good idea for people to have a car?

回答
I think it is a good idea for people to have a car．
→質問文に for people とあるので、そのまま使うことは構いません。
for us としてもよいですが、そうしないとだめなわけではありません。
適切な行替えを行いましょう。
I have two reasons.
First People can go to many places.
→ First, [they] can go to many places.
First の直後にコンマ。People は they
for example They can go to beautiful scenerys.
→ For example, they can go to see beautiful scenery by car.
新たな文を書き始めるのですから Forは大文字で。theyは文中なので小文字で。
Second, I can going to picnic with my family and my friends.
→Second, they can go on a picnic with their family and friends.
今まで they としてきたのに「I」に主語が切り替わるのは唐突です。統一しましょう。
ピクニックに行くは「go on a picnic」です。
少なくとも「I can going」はありえませんね。また picnicは「行先の場所」ではないため、go to picnicとはしません。
From these my thought it is a good idea for people to have a car．
→For the reasons above, I think it is a good idea for people to have a car.

趣旨は理解できますが、細かいところで
・文法エラー
・大文字、小文字のエラー
・scenerys など語彙エラー（スペルが違うし、数えられないのに複数形にしている）
があります。あと一息なのですが、このままだと合格点をちょっと切ってしまうかも知れません。まだめげずにがんばりましょうね。

Answer 2

OK,ちょっと辛いぞ。

I think it is a good idea for people to have a car．
→I think it is a good idea for us to have a car．

I have two reasons. First People can go to many places.
→I have two reasons. First we can go wherever we want.

for example They can go to beautiful scenerys.
不要！。なんでこんなアホなこと書くの？もっと頭は働かんの？？

Second, I can going to picnic with my family and my friends.
→Second, I can go on a picnic with my family or my friends.

From these my thought it is a good idea for people to have a car．
→Due to above reason I think it is good for us to have a car.

https://www.britannica.com/dictionary/picnic
If you go on a picnic, you go somewhere to have a picnic
Let's go on a picnic today.

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