英検2級のライティングについて質問です。

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英検2級のライティングについて質問です。Some old traditional Japanese-style houses have been changed into hotels and restaurants. Do you think such hotels and restaurants will become more common in the future?
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I think that such hotels and restaurants will become more common in the future. I have two reasons why I think so. To begin with, some traditional Japanese-style houses cost a lot of money to keep. Changing houses lead to cost down. In addition,safe is one of the important factors. Thanks to new technology, We can eat and stay safe. For these reasons mentioned above, I think that such hotels and restaurants will become more common in the future.

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I think that such hotels and restaurants will become more common in the future. I have two reasons why I think so. To begin with, some traditional Japanese-style houses cost a lot of money to keep. Changing houses leads to cost down. In addition, safety is one of the important factors. Thanks to new technology, we can eat and stay safe. For these reasons mentioned above, I think that such hotels and restaurants will become more common in the future.
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